CrystalSorceress

Okay, this was a very interesting poem. It definitely caught my attention. One thing about it though, was that I kept expecting something unexpected to happen, like a sudden twist ...

I think that this is a good story, and it intrigued me from the beginning. All together, there wasn't much I saw that needed a lot of change. But I ...

I think that, all in all, this is a good start. However, your paragraphs seem to be divided a little weirdly, so you might want to fix that. Also, there ...

I think that this is definitely a good start. I like the meaning, which to me is quite realistic. I agree with Shasta that the rhyming does sound a little ...

All in all, I think this is a good poem. But there were a few things that confused me. For starters, what exactly does it mean to 'give control'? That ...

I think this poem has potential. It is a little long, but I like the style. It's unique. It seems a bit repetitive at times, so you could probably just ...