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Hi Emilie, I do like short poems, and I do find it possible to give a story and emotions through a few short lines. In this case however, it needs ...

Hey there Emilie, A nice neat poem here :) It was well written with a good rhyming scheme in it that didn't sound too forced at all. Sometimes the rhythm ...

Hey Spotswood, Nice story here :) It has the perfect hanging feel to it, vague so that not all the information is there, but enough to keep the story going ...

Hey Amrita, It took me a while to get there but I remembered I said I would look at some work! Better late than never, right? :P So, all I ...

Hey Umaima, Nice story here :) I've read the first chapter as well so it all makes sense to me. I like Jack's character, and I like how you have ...

Hey there Misstoria, Nice poem you have there. It has some interesting lines, and some intriguing ideas. I especially liked how The Glass was capitalized, even though it is a ...

Hey Scribblebug, Another good chapter. I liked how it ended with a distress call because that made me want to turn over the next page and read more. If I ...

Hi WickedSnitch, Back again for more ;) Okay, so this was another good chapter. It's improved from the previous ones and I like it more. I think I agree with ...

Hey Skins, Nice chapter here. I really love Effie's character and her voice. It sounds so natural and realistic, and not forced at all. Almost like she could be someone ...

Hey Sanday, Well, I've never watched Stragate Atlantis so this is based purely on your writing alone. I liked it! It was a nice idea, even for fanfiction. The characters ...

Back again Rishabh, Another good chapter. I like how they approached this whole death as a mystery, and were looking for clues even when it was quite clearly the hygiene ...

Hi Rishabh, A nice chapter again. I think your dialogue is coming along and becoming more realistic, which is good. As improvement always is :) I still think you should ...

Hey there, This story is okay. I couldn't get through the whole thing because the layout was really bothering me. It looks like a really long poem. Maybe edit it ...

Hello LegibleText Uh this story was alright? It was very fast paced and a bit confusing because of it. I didn't really understand what was going on. One moment there ...

Hey Scarli :) So I have no idea what Avatar is about because I have never been bothered enough to watch it. So all this was new to me. But ...