Deanie

Hello Blue, me again. Another interesting chapter. You have such a lovely way with description, and it's always so interesting to see what he encounters at the park. For example ...

I'm seeing how you probably won't run out! Maybe I should try to mix it up a bit so Ben isn't always saving her. Also, I will read through it ...

Hello again! I really really like Conrad. He seems like the type of guy who will give a lot in a friendship, and try and do what's best for a ...

Yes! I get that a lot and it's partly because I got side tracked myself. So when I edit I'm going to bring them in more, and they should pop ...

Thanks for the great review again Blue! I will try to clean up those two pointers of course ^^

Yeah I know I do

You are reading this in a weird order :P But yeah, it will all be explained later on!

Eh thanks for the reviews Blue :) Yes, I should make the trickery part more... tricky to get through ^^ I think I might draw it out and try and ...

I love it

Yay I have a The too! :D

Thank you The Timmy

Will definitely work on making the whole ring and cliff situation more clear. And nitpicks will be edited when I have the whole story up. Thanks sis

Hello c: Agh I love this chapter so much, I'm not going to say one bad thing about it. At first I was like, she realizes how she was brainwashed ...

Remember, she has to find five of them. But yes, I need to remember to keep the language simple. And I'll mention that Ben gets sent back to the real ...

Mm, maybe as they approach the ring I'll let Maria catch a glimpse of them and of course, hear the calling.