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  • Lyric Poetry Re: Morning Glory

    Hello, I couldn't find any grammatic errors that hasn't all ready been pointed out so, I'll point out a few other things that i feel should/could be improved :) One, ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: The Eagle and I

    So this was a beautifully, well-written poem! The flow was a bit choppy at times but not something to dwell over too much since it went on well for the ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: My First Date... (A Contest Entry)

    Soo, Hi, I'm Demoness and I was intentially going to review this for you but I ended up just admiring it for it's beauty! Woww! I've never read anything like ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: The Tree Dweller

    So, I've read this a couple of times now and decided over again that it's too massive for me to review... Yet I'll give it a try. The reason I ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Lyrics Re: deleted

    Helloue! This is a very strong poem emotionally - it brings up a sore subject and I think you've done a great job expressing the hurt one must feel being ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: The Way You Say My Name.

    This is a really sweet and beautiful poem and I love your rhymes and the way you built up this text! I just had a problem with the first two ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Piece's of My freakin' Mind

    They don't belong together, each text in bold is a title for the piece to come! That might explain the choppiness! :P

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Stonger Than Love

    Heyy, VERY impressive to manage with that rhymescheme and still manage not to make any of them sound forced! The piece flowed on well and I liked the rythm too.. ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Beyond Looks

    So I thought this was very good for someone who's doesn't consider themselves a poet! I like the structure and how every last line in each stanza rhymes with eachother, ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Piece's of My freakin' Mind

    Read; So, here's a bunch of little pieces taken from the depths of my minds... some are short poems, others are random thoughts or statements... Enjoy! :D Pieces of my ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Written In This Skin

    Okay so.. I was gonna review this but then I read MMM:s review and well... I also read you poem and you're writings are just so much deeper and advanced ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Train Tracks

    No you're right! It's supposed to be "passed" I read it as.. like he was trying to get over something that had happened earlier... I donno what I was thinking ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Memoria In Aeterna

    Hellue! I'm Demoness, and here comes my review! Eh, so - I like the story you're telling here and like Meg said, it makes you think, which is good. You ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Not Yet

    Helluee! This was a quite delightful thing to read, it was vivid, full of descriptions and it also flowed well... yet, I've got one thing to point out. Mainly, it's ...

    Aug 11, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Waves of Fire

    Hello, This is the Demoness speaking! I've come to review this piece! So.. I like this idea - with only three words per line and for the better part of ...

    Aug 11, 2011


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