Derailey

I liked the idea, and I can sense that this could turn out to be a very excellent story. There were only a couple of mispellings in here, and some ...

I loved that. It was beautiful, and well put together. =) Well done.

I am terribly sorry, but I couldn't get through the first part of it. There were far too many errors with punctuation. I scanned down the page, and it was ...

It was interesting, and I think I see a comparison with the wolf pack and family life, but there were quite a few problems I noticed in the story. At ...

Very cute. I don't know if you wrote this from personal experience or what, but it was perfectly fleshed when it came to the thoughts of the first person. You ...