Desire

Why was this deleted ??? I was looking forward to reading it!

thanx for the reviews guys, im going to fix the typo :)

Thanks so much for an absolutely amazing review!!! I have to hand this in tomorrow so was counting on YWS to review my piece :) To answer you question regarding ...

is this about a romance in October that ended? few grammar errors but I enjoyed it, made me think a little bit :)

"And sadly, a song filled with fear." I've used the words "and sadly" to show that the fact that the song is filled with fear is a tragedy because it ...

To: Creative I initially started writing this poem using the word "heart" but replaced it with "song" instead, thought it sounded better and I wanted to create the impression that ...

She was really shot and then then Jesus took a walk with her and that's why she was "out of it"... don't really want to call it a coma because ...

This is so beautiful... I love the story that you've told and the imagery in this poem! I don't know what else to say other than WOW, this really was ...

Thanks for the reviews guys, I'm entering this into a competition so really appreciate how positive your reviews have been :) Glad you liked my piece :) xxx

Thanks so much for the help :) Took your advice and will have to wait and see now what others think :) xxx

thanks to all the reviewers :) Really appreciate your reviews!! To hazellgreene: To be honest I didn't intend on writing it in that style, just kind of went with it ...

Thanks for the review :) It always means alot that a person would take time in the firs place to review my stuff ! To give a bit more background ...

Hi thank you so much for your post :) I was really nervous about submitting stuff! I'll definitely take a look at that line and maybe see what other people ...