Doubt

Really like this one. The edited version made it perfect. Keep it up.

Bravo, Bravo! I loved it. I love all your work.

"I love you heaps" ? that sounds off.

Will do. Thanks.

Quite a poem. Not exactly my favourite style but it was nice.

*drools* Magnificent. And yes, very suspenseful. I really enjoyed that one. Your style of writing is inspiring. Every description is made better by your choice of words. Can't wait for ...

Indeed. Quite good for a ten-year old.

Yeah. When I decide to stop being lazy I'm going to revise that and the rest of chapter one (once written). Any comments on the actual story? Hello. My apologies ...

You know I thought it was great. :wink: Why the hell aren't you on MSN much, punk?!

Yeah. When I decide to stop being lazy I'm going to revise that and the rest of chapter one (once written). Any comments on the actual story?

Wow. Amazingly good imagery. Where the hell you get your inspiration (and vocabulary) from, is a mystery to me.

Just noticed the "An Alright Start" pun. :P I've told you what I think about this. Magnificent. Keep it up, pal.

hey ur right, thx! :D Glad to be of service. :)

Umm... Is it about religion brainwashing people? And knowledge is the power I control And heresy’s a leisurely walk now And who knows if I’m right, I could be wrong ...

It's good. You definately have your own style of poetry. The only thing that I think should be improved on is the description. It's important and there's pretty much no ...