Dr.Atl

Cruel memories fade as I live this facade. facade is pronounced 'fuh-sahd' so that particular rhyme would not work. A couple of spelling errors, but nothing drastic. I can't really ...

I like the basic plot so far, but i'm definitely noticing some awkward diction. For a farmer, the narrative is really formal. While I was reading, the sudden paragraphs of ...

Beautiful poem! About a scarecrow if i'm not mistaken? I really like that you made them seem like both hope and failure at the same time. They told the scarecrow ...

Your rhyming scheme puzzles me. There is no real set ABABA Pattern or however you want it on any of these stanzas.Right here for example it would have been just ...

It growled. I stared at the animal trap on the ground and fervently hoped that a strong animal rest inside. Bit of repetition here, why not trade out animal with ...

I like it!It brings to mind Dio and Rush. My only problem is that last line of the second stanza Just stretch your hand and feel the fluffy cream (Stretched) ...

For some reason, your poem made me think of Terry Pratchett.I really dig these sort of poems because I enjoy just good old fashioned rhymes. But for those, who'd like ...

First the ruby slippers, straight from the yellow brick road, dust still at the heel. This is my favorite stanza in the poem, it makes you think of dorothy, but ...