Dreamer84

I have to honestly say that was weird.....I thought it was an interesting story especially since you made Umbra a shadow of the main characters imagination. I love that line ...

Wow o.0 That kinda took my breath away for a second there....I really liked your decription because I think it gives the poem more power and strength. I loved the ...

I liked it. That is a really good question also. I think it is a short poem but the way you dragged out the question made it seem long. It ...

I thought over all that it was a good piece. But, it was kinda boring. I'm doing that... now I'm doing this...blah blah blah it just gets boring and doesn't ...

I liked the story I thought it had a very strong meaning. However, In the story you start with a girl and she is a warrior then you skip over ...

I have to agree with what Zia is saying. I thought you had a wonderful story but it just made no sense. I don't think you should have put the ...

I really liked it. It was really good. Easy to understand and read. I like the way the words seem to flow together. I like how it seems as though ...

Wow I really liked your narrative. Personally I don't see the humor in it but I do find a great deal of suspense. All I think you need to change ...

I thought this story had a lot of potential. However, I don't know what you mean when you say "mech's". Also another thing is I think you should change around ...

I like it because i like the way you see him yet we have a problem. :/ I think you need different word choice because I don't like the way ...

I love it!!!!!! I can literally hear the rhythem as I read!!! :) But there is one thing I found wrong...a few of the words you used made no sense ...

The second paragraph didn't make sense to me :( I really like the poem overall but the words didn't seem to go together. in the first paragraph you tried to ...