Dreamer84

thanks so much and the part of where the man is referring to the main character as "kid" is because I'm trying to keep the main characters identity and gender ...

thanks so much and the part of where the man is referring to the main character as "kid" is because I'm trying to keep the main characters identity and gender ...

thanks so much and the part of where the man is referring to the main character as "kid" is because I'm trying to keep the main characters identity and gender ...

That was really cool but I think that you should put in some more detail. maybe change the view of some of the text like in italics and try to ...

I don't get it :( at first he acts like a man in love then a child going to school and then a kid doing his chores. which is he??? ...

I really like it but I think there should be more information and a little more background. I personally think this should be made into a book not a short ...