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Dulcet

formerly Bubbles/bubblysprinkles

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: The Sirens Song

    Let me start by saying the prologue is unnecessary, because you already have a great start in Chapter 1! Prologues should really only be used if you want to tell ...

    Oct 28, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Teen Fiction Re: Prologue

    (Welcome to YWS! I'm just a few days old on here as well, and I'm enjoying my time here so hopefully you are too.) This prologue certainly leaves me wanting ...

    Oct 22, 2016
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Action / Adventure Re: Two little monsters

    This review is going to be more nitpicks than anything else, to be honest. You already have a good grip on storytelling, and the story itself is really interesting! The ...

    Oct 22, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: One Hundred Lives to Live

    Instantly, I'm hooked. I love the first sentence. The simple detail about the wet sleeve just says so much, and to start the story with it sets the scene already. ...

    Oct 20, 2016
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Horror Re: Just the start

    Nice start! The beginning paragraph is certainly intriguing, and I wonder who 'she' is. Just be careful about paragraph spacing, because it's very easy for readers to lose their place ...

    Oct 17, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Boarding school for the Elite

    Hi, this is my first review so I'm sorry if it's a bit iffy! Hopefully the quote tags work. First, I want to say I love the characters already. They're ...

    Oct 16, 2016


We are discreet sheep; we wait to see how the drove is going, and then go with the drove.
— Mark Twain