Elelel

Other characters could not want them to be together and try to separate them in various ways, and maybe it could be affective for a time being. One could get ...

Sally to Jaikal: I'm Pain and I luuuuuuurve you! *muffled laughter* My voice is a little different because ... uh ... I have a ... um ... a ... cold? ...

Ah, but those bones are filled with bone marrow (so aren't truly hollow), whereas bird bones are filled only with air . Good point. Hadn't noticed that. Whoops! Let’s look ...

No worries! Yay! It's all pretty and spaced out! If there's a reason, then it's fine. I don't know how you could make it less confusing. Anyway, that was just ...

Spaces between the paragraphs would certainly make this easier to read. A huge block of writing can be rather intimidating. But I won't make you do that before I critique ...

Hello Skell! I did enjoy reading your story. It's a good start for a story. Lots of lovely conflict and stuff. One thing I noticed about your grammar is that ...

I'd swear that some human bones are hollow ... wait up ... please excuse me for a sec ... What's bone marrow? Many bones are hollow. Their hollowness makes bones ...

There's a reason bones aren't hollow... *confusion* ... but some bones are hollow. Bird bones are, to make the birds lighter to help with flying and stuff. EDIT: Evolution is ...

Oh yeah. I forgot to mention my huge and nasty callus on my middle finger of my right hand due to handwriting. I grip the pen too hard, and it ...

It doesn't kill me to finish a series. I'm actually a lot like Snoink in that I will often read the end before I get to it, and that I ...

Hello! I'm El. I will be your critiquer this ... evening? Does 4:10pm rate as evening? Anyway, welcome! Once Upon a Time... Yep, you guessed it: In a Far Off ...

I think so. Even if it just makes customers think that if there's a big fuss being made about showing off my book, it must be good.

OMG! Could this be? A chance for 50k of Weasle Queen? Of course I'm in!

- don't give in to the depression attack at 35k - you don't need an outline to write a lot of words - never hold off a good plot development ...

=D It's a smily face. I am so good at this.