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Yeah, I'm with Smaur on this one. What I noticed about it's annoyingness was not the adjectives but the way the sentences was put together. The conjunctions and whatnot. I'm ...

Do you still want my tips then? Well, you can have them anyway. You're saying what you did to it a lot. Like "I sewed" and so on. I don't ...

GO AUSTRALIA!!! YAY!!! Two medals so far for us. One bronze, and a gold which was one by a man who was born in Canada. On behalf of the country, ...

Payback time! Let's see if I can help you like you helped me. First up, I really don't know the answer to the question of chapter per thread or all ...

Is this your 'teenaged angst' piece? I really must congradulate you for managing to describe it to me as teenaged angst without it actually appearing to have any angst in ...

My name? Well, it's not any language. I made it up. And it's my pleasure to help! :P

Is this mostly just to express the plot? I wasn't sure. Well, there's a lot of grammatical errors in that. You keep putting spaces before commas and full stops, which ...

*stares* Yep. That helps. I think you picked out every single tiny little sentence I couldn't get quite right, and thanks to you I think I can fix them now. ...

Matchmaking parents! Hehe! I was almost hoping this would be the guy she fell for, seeing as she walked in all dirty. Your dialogue seems a little flat, not just ...

Ahem. Ladies and gentlemen, this is the beginning of my story that I wrote last November for NaNoWriMo. That means it was kind of rushed and not properly thought through. ...

This shows a promising plot that could develop in following chapters. It seems very fast, years are passing in the blink of an eye, but I can see the dilema. ...

YAY!!! Snoink's sister! Welcome! I'm Eloere, but everyone calls me El. Good luck with Nate ...

I think you'll scare more critiquers away with longer posts than with shorter ones ... but I don't really know how long chapters ought to be, because you can really ...

Well, get a huge rock or a large piece of furniture and put it behind the door instead. After all, you're not locking it, are you?

I like English more. I have more fun in it. Maths is Ok, I suppose. I'm ok at it, but it's just ... Maths? I don't know. THere's nothing exciting ...