Elinor

I got through six paragraphs of edits, and I tried and tried, but the story just wasn't really grabbing my attention. I think you should just add more about the ...

The night was dark, darker than normal. What makes this night so special? A young girl in a dirty, worn out dress dragged her feet across the fields, heading towards ...

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When I smile, it's fake. There is nothing wrong with this first sentence, but maybe elaboarte a little bit more on why your MC smiles fakely? Like, this MC is ...

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Y'ello. I'm Ellie and I will be your reviewer for today. Love sucks. It’s not real and it sucks. Learn this now. I did. Okay. This First Paragraph is a ...

. The noise of the clicking clock echoed through the empty home. A single snore came with every minute that passed. A boy released these hallow, moan, grunts. At fifteen, ...

It was scary as hell the day that America got bombed. I can't remember the date but the day is a vivid image in my head. I am assuming you ...

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This is a very good, Well-written story. However, you are lacking description and exictement. I would like to see more of it. Perhaps If you could try to stretch it ...

This was a very good piece. I do have a few problems, though. in some parts you are gramatically incorrect or confusing. For Instance : It’s easy to understand why ...

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