Emerson

Introduction I a little odd, not to mention the syntax. But I don't feel like editing that right now :-p IMO it should be chapter one, or alternatively, prologue. Novels ...

*gasp!* Look! It's you d00d! So cute =]

d00dz, stay on topic or I will eat your face. 'nuf spamming of my thread =P PM her if you want.

I'm here to recritique! Yay! So, I read the new version, most of it I liked. I read the old version for comparison. Stanza 1: I like the old version ...

Hey there Dear, finally came round to check this out ^_^ No major line by lines or anything--just a few comments on the text. Larcke s’s face softened. Snoink would ...

Try as she might [s]not to[/s], Eana let the rumors get the better of her. Try as she might not to, Eana let the rumors get the better of her. ...

I have paint shop pro 8 (I seriously need to buy the new versions...) I edited the contrast, and some other picture qualities to it. If you're considering buying an ...

Pestal

Acustic = acoustic. Spell check, yo.

Well... First some general notes: 1. please, please, capitalize the pronoun I, and other things where capitalization is needed. 2. Punctuate. This will help you: Poetry & Punctuation 3. Either ...

Emma> Be-u-t-ful =) I wish my poses were that cool.

I liked this one more than the first, but I have to think of them together, since they are only in parts, and they worked very well. Most repetition fails, ...

Those are neat, but odd. They look like something you'd buy in hot topic. I like them, but I think their faces could be done in a better way, the ...

... Well, for the minor notes: capitalization, typos, and probably spelling too. Read over your work before you post it, don't give us a messy thing to read, give us ...

An offense given From a time unknown Sparks anger and hatred And the will for revenge I thought that, perhaps you were cutting punctuation altogether, but there it is in ...