Emerson

Eh, I don't usually critique lyrics, because lyrics are meant along side music, but I will anyway. Sorry if I critique it all too much like poetry; I am too ...

Hoy Colly! I liked the flow it had, though it was a bit off in some places. It flowed but... it didn't. Which is neither good or bad, just my ...

It comes off like "Even if I tried" By: A neverending dream. It's really long... I probably wouldn't pick it up. Backstage Story

No. - Lev I am allergic to some types flower pollens. How ironic? *giggles* - Fleur Do you dance when no one is watching?

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Granted, but I steal it from you because Flyleaf rocks, and I want to steal your music! I wish I had more time to read.

Salt makes me think of rubbing salt into wounds, and how that hurts really badly... But it might be a magic book? I probably wouldn't pick it up, or so ...

I like the theme you are trying to present, asthma attacks. But I think it would come off a lot better if, rather than listing and describing, you made the ...

As I Run This Blade Threw My Flesh threw=through In A Hours Time I'll Be Out Of Breath "a hour" could debatable also be "an hour" (h is sometimes vowel ...

It was long... X_X You realize you confuse the crap out of me? Okay, sarah coming out of no where. I get it. Jon? There isn't much of an explanation ...

Typos scattered here in there. And in the last line, should be an. Pulled through a plain, like a toddler with a blanket. "plain" doesn't make sense to me. It ...

Nice nose! xD Is there any links you could give me on how to make a cover? I'm artistically challenged. (unless it is writing...) or could you tell me how ...

They were left alone, if their family was religious enough to believe that they as well would be cursed for sheltering a demon child. Are you missing a word here ...

Unlike the above, I'm not a sucker for poems like these :-/ It's the same thing you see every day... what makes this different from the tons of other poems ...

Bonjour et Bienvenue! What might I call you? Speculum? Or can I give you a nickname? Off days are never fun...What do you write? Make sure to read all the ...