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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Shifters: Chapter 11

    Hi Spitfire! Thanks for the PM! Well, on to the review. “No . ” (: Full-stop missed. What started as a gem for a ring became as big as a ...

    May 16, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Lyssa and Elvira: CH. 1

    Hi Lavender! Whoa! Perhaps before posting next time, you could set the layout to 'story'. This looks like a solid wall of text - not at all appealing. But don't ...

    May 4, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: UnAcceptaBle Part One

    I softly kissed him softly. I don't know why, but it just sounds less awkward this way around. His lips pressed back against mine and I could just feel the ...

    May 1, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Slayer (Chapter Three)

    Hiya DD! Sorry it's been a while - I've had a hectic week. (: Anyway, you have certainly delivered in this chapter! Can't wait for the next! ;D ..And I ...

    May 1, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Shifters: Chapter 10

    Hiya! Another great chapter. (: Loved the whole shirtless scene, and that one between her and Nicolas. Lovely. Well, on to the review! He looked as though he was mocking ...

    Apr 27, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Slayer (Chapter Two)

    Hey DD! Thanks for the PM! I would have missed this otherwise. I wouldn't worry too much about the description. It will improve, definitely. I just looked over a bunch ...

    Apr 25, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Slayer (Chapter One)

    Hiya! Welcome to YWS! This is a wonderful site to improve your writing and I hope you enjoy it on here. :smt003 This has plenty of potential, but to really ...

    Apr 23, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Romeo and Juliet a Twist in the Story

    Surely he's over Rosaline? ;) I thought the ending was done very, very well. I wasn't expecting the twist at all, as I figured you were just puppeting Shakespeare’s characters. ...

    Mar 4, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Shifters: Chapter 6

    Hi! I saw your chapter ten ages ago, read a little bit through then realised it was actually amazing, so I went to the beginning. Blooming brilliant. I've loved every ...

    Mar 2, 2010
  • Other » General, General Re: Sweet sacrifice for true love

    Wow, magicwithin, that was great. But I spotted a problem or two: I've anticipated your arrival, fantasized over the precise point of our first embrace, forming various understated conclusions of ...

    Feb 27, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: FREAK

    Where did you stop reading? I didn't. I read it all. Stopping was an unbearable thought. C: Even if you had posted loads of chapters I doubt I would have ...

    Feb 26, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Don't Have a Title, but Please READ! (Chapter 1)

    Hey noheroes! Can I call you that for short? Welcome to YWS! This is a wonderful site, filled with people always eager to help and develop your writing skills. I'm ...

    Feb 24, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: First Blush(Edited)

    Hi Nativecatcher! I just read your unedited version before spotting this one, and I have to say, I preferred your simple "Thursday was when it first happened" to the new ...

    Feb 21, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Golden After - 1.1

    KJ! You have something new here, I see. Well, I did enjoy it. Although I spotted: Yet another reason to mourn Father’s violet passing Violent? It always annoys me when ...

    Feb 9, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Deadly Secrets-Chap. One (Title help?)

    Hi Kate! Thanks for the PM, I wouldn't have caught this otherwise. C: And once again I did enjoy it. :D Anyways, on to the review! My foot inched downward ...

    Feb 6, 2010


The tools of conquest do not necessarily come with bombs and explosions and fallout. There are weapons that are simply thoughts, attitudes, prejudices; to be found only in the minds of men. For the record, prejudices can kill, and suspicions can destroy. A thoughtless, frightened search for a scapegoat has a fallout all of its own.
— Rod Serling, Twilight Zone