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Mumbo Jumbo! =D So. Umm. I have this strange little piece, yes? For Cal's contest. I tried writing it in a style I've never really experimented with before, and I ...

[Already Gone—Kelly Clarkson: 022. Exodus] The sky is an overenthusiastic shade of Pepto Bismol, as if Mother Nature thinks she can smother my woes with a large dose of bubblegum ...

I agree with Twit-- my 8-year-old cousin uses pretty mature phrases and thoughts, just she says 'I brung the music' and stuff like that. ;) They don't always know the ...

Hey Unster! ^^ I see Gal has attacked your poem, eh? :P Don't worry-- not everyone on YWS is quite so brutally honest. I'll just give you a quick run-through ...

Hey Bubbles. ^^ I saw that this had no critiques, and I thought I'd throw in my two-cents. I really loved this. Your narrator's emotion was well-presented, because it wasn't ...

You said you were bored! ;) I already have some fantastic crits on this one, but I'd love one more opinion before the deadline. Arizona Princess Other Fiction I can't ...

Hey Rosey! ^^ Thanks for the request. Let's see what we can do here. :arrow: First line? Meh. I really think you need something less of a narration there and ...

[Footprints in the Sand-- Leona Lewis; 014. Logos] David had, against his better judgment, gone through the drive-through window to order his strawberry milkshake. There was something markedly menacin

I'm sorry, everyone. Chat's malfunctions today are a sign directed at me-- I think the god of the internet realm is trying to tell me that my science exam tomorrow ...

Hey Galerius, here as requested. ^^ I see you already have some reviews on this, but I'll just throw in my two cents here as well. Alright, so. I think ...

Edited. ^^ I added some more to their conversation, and I'd really appreciate opinions on whether or not the additions work? Thanks so much, everyone.

Wow. Tigger, I am thoroughly astonished that this is your first piece posted on YWS. Really, what have you been waiting for?!? :P Okay, so I see that you already ...

My chior director complimented my voice. ^^ I'm more than halfway through the book I'm supposed to finish by my Literature exam on Friday, which means I'll be done by ...

Hey Adna! ^^ I guess I've decided to go around critiquing all of Jon's crazy prompt contestants. I will say, I really enjoyed this poem. It made me think. I ...

Hey Music. ^^ Evi here. jon's going a bit whacko with his prompts, don't you think? xD I do agree with Jon here that your main issue is rhythm. When ...