Evi

Hey, here as requested. ^^ Sorry for any wait. I agree that the beginning was a bit odd. Too wordy, too legal-sounding. I thought that you're author's-note was continuing there, ...

Yay! =D You joined! ;) Obviously, my username is Evi, nice to (re)meet you. To make a welsome post, though, you might want to head over here: . You can ...

Hey, so. ^^ This was actually quite funny, for less than 250 words. I liked the Disney movie joke, and the woman thinking of her cat. However, beyond that I ...

Hey Hammerkid. Evi here. In 2016 a man entered the hotel. I don't think you need to include 2016. It adds a date stamp to your story, which makes it ...

Hey Serena, sorry it took me so long to get to this! ^^ I knew where I was at that moment, but I wasn’t sure how I had gotten there. ...

Hey Zoe. ^_^ So, this was rather short, ya? I think a bit too short for us to get a real idea of what the story's like, or how well ...

Hey Jon! So this is short and sweet, requires very little nitpicking. I felt a little underwhelmed with this, honestly. I think the subject matter-- dreams, nightmares, sleep --is so ...

Hey Pudin! ^^ Here as requested, forgive me for any delays. Nothing can be compared to you. Nothing in the masterpiece of this world can be compared to you. I ...

Hey Skittles, here as requested. ^^ The other reviewers' points are valid, so fix those grammar issues and such. I may repeat something, because I didn't read all of them. ...

Hey Sammim! (I'm calling you that because the site already has two Sams :P) I'm Evi. The Mississippi sun was beating down upon the world at the moment my life ...

Hey Sphinx, welcome to YWS. ^^ Congrats on your first posted piece! I'm Evi, here to review. :arrow: So, to start off with, I do quite like the first sentence. ...

Knightly Angel! ^^ Haven't reviewed anything of yours in a while, though I have read a lot of your poetry and come to the conclusion that I really love it. ...

Hey Elinor. ^^ Hmm, yes, I agree with Rosey. You seem to have written this opening chapter just to get the plot and characters out there. There's nothing really wrong ...

Hey Burgs, Evi here. ^^ Love the avatar, by the way. :P April stood at the edge of the bath. As far as first sentences go, this one doesn't offer ...

Hey Lilz, Evi here for an emergency attack. ^_^ Won't be long, really, just a couple of points. Every morning, the same terrible feeling of nausea had swept over her ...