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Hey Sinnful! Sorry about the confusion, but I'll review this piece now. :oops: The pool spreads out around me, glittering and sparkling as hazy daylight descends upon it – Because ...

Hannah! :oops: I'm so dreadfully sorry. I was a bad CBF. I completely forgot about this! Can you ever possibly forgive me? Alright, so. This was rather short, yes? :wink: ...

Hey, Kamas, here as requested! As this was your only short story piece, I decided to give this a look-see. :arrow: Grammar First of all, you have a couple of ...

Hey lakegirls! Sorry about the delay. Just a quick point-- normally things are neater and more organized if you post each segment of your story in a seperate thread, dear. ...

Hey, Rosey! I felt so bad about my review on the first draft. :oops: I'm not in such a hurry today, so I hope this one is a bit more ...

*Evi alert* :lol: 'Ello,Cat. My spacebar is being obstinately uncooperative today, so if I miss a space here or there, please forigve me. This is going to be mistake-ridden, I'm ...

I'm here, June, just as I threatened. :twisted: Brace thyself. My grandmother's keyboard is ancient, and this crit ( crit -- not review :P ) is going to be filled ...

Hey, Pen, here as requested! Thanks for using my thread, and so sorry it took me this long to get around to this! :oops: To how much you’ve ruined me. ...

Becki! You can too write poetry! I thought this was quite nice, actually. Not sure if you wanted a full, in-depth review, but I'll just give you some genereal comments ...

Alright, love, Evi here! :D Nice to meet you, and welcome to YWS! Glad to see that you've posted something. So, it's not that we love to complain about punctuation, ...

I know who I am, I'm just a nobody, but when your a someone and everyone else is taking stabs at who you are, well then I guess I come ...

Aww! So, nutmegan, this was a nice little story. You wrote it well, and there were no grotesque grammar issues. Although, I think you could do with reading this aloud ...

Alright, so, it was certainly not a terrible read! *tsk tsk* Have some confidence. So, your rhyming was rather sporatic, but I suppose you intended for that? The first stanza ...

'Undercover Girl' by Christine Harris is a good little series, but the books are rather short and it certainly isn't on an advanced reading level. I love the Alex Rider ...

June! *tacklehugs* It's so sweet that you wrote this with your sister! You know, I do not believe that I've had the privalege of actually reading any of your work ...