FireSpyGirl

Hi there! This is a very interesting poem. To me, it is actually kind of realistic. To me, this poem is telling about someone who is sitting at a computer ...

Hi there! So I really don't have much critiquing or suggestions to offer, as this is a very interesting chapter. I like the imagery, and I like how well you ...

Hi there! So, I will start with what I liked about this story, and that was the emotion, and the fact that it really gets to me. The content is ...

Hi there! Again, a really good chapter! There are a few sentences that are rather awkward though, and I'm going to point those out. First one: "the dark, thick woods ...

This is an amazing poem! I loved every word, verse, and sentence. :D. A few of the sentences to me had a few extra words, but that may just be ...

This is really good! I love the depth, the feeling, the pain. You expressed it really well. What I also love about this poem is that everyone can understand it, ...

Hi there! Also a very cute chapter!! I'll try not to be to harsh. XD. These lines:"She was supposed to be waked up by her mom, dad and the village ...

Hi there! I really enjoyed this poem! The only thing I noticed was a small typo. :). This line: "but the still slip by so quickly" Was that "the" supposed ...

I love this!! I'm just going to mention my favorite part! "Green. Green like the grass blades that poked through the spring thaw. Green like the vines that stretched across ...

Hi there! This is good! There are three sentences that felt rather awkward though. This one: ""So on a scale from one to ten, how much do you miss the ...

This is good! There is only one sentence that I noticed. "Even if she was just a little better than useless." To me, this just feels a little awkward. Maybe ...

Wow. This is good! So this won't be much of a review, but I just think we could use a little more description. Why is "She" so mad? Why did ...

Hi there! So I really, really like this! There are few lines that kind of broke the rhythm you have going, and I would just like to offer a few ...

Hi there! Nice chapter! Now feel free to ignore everything I say, as I tend to focus a lot on how sentences flow and words. So in the very beginning: ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! So this is an interesting story, and I'll try not to be to harsh. :). So most of what I am noticing is that your ...