Fireweed

Cool. Though it's random and non-sensical, it's quite clever... Interesting what a sleep-deprived mind (or rather 3 sleep deprived minds in this case) can come up with. Dancing capybaras and ...

Wow, that's ace for a nine-year old!! I love it how in the begginning, you think that it's actually happening,and then it turns out to be the knght telling a ...

HUZZAH FOR BAND GEEKS! ^____^ there seems to be quite alot of us on YWS...

'Ello!! you sound cool.Thank you for the cookie, it was scrumptious.

OH!MY!GOD! *drools and stares intently, knocked speechless by howl's astounding shmexiness* quit being modest. you DO do him justice. it's like the real deal. Miyazaki is so awesome; his style ...

AWESOME. I love how each stanza is like a random snapshot; seperate images with a very slight, subtle connection. Great imagery and wording. You tied it all together really well ...

I can verify that doing fanart has helped Jenna, because I saw her earlier stuff and there's a definite improvement. I know nothing about drawing, but I think it probably ...

I like. I loved the way you kept using water-related metaphors, and "Lips tangle like fishing hooks" is really awesome and unique. The anaphora was really well-done too; nice and ...

Simple but lovely. Cool how you created such a vivid image with so few words. I like the simile comparing the stars to pearls on a necklace; very unique.Nice work.

Like several people mentioned, it was a bit repetetive and rhyme-y, but the way you showed the girl maturing was really effective. Your rhymes are good- not to forced; but ...

Like several people mentioned, it was a bit repetetive and rhyme-y, but the way you showed the girl maturing was really effective. Your rhymes are good- not to forced; but ...

Like several people mentioned, it was a bit repetetive and rhyme-y, but the way you showed the girl maturing was really effective. Your rhymes are good- not to forced; but ...

Like emotion_less said, this seems a bit choppy and disconnected. To me, it seems more like a setting for a story or something than a poem. Great as that, but ...

okay, heres something noone has mentioned: ZEE TITLE!!! I was just browsing some old YWS fiction and I saw another story called revenge. a friend 'o' mine recently wrote one ...

there's some really lovely things in here... i love the way you worded the last paragraph. your character is intriguing; I'd love to see more. A few parts seem a ...