Fireweed

I am deeply sorry. You are amazingly brave for putting this out there; I hope it helped you to share it. It wouldn't feel right to critique this even if ...

I really enjoyed this. Great job showing rather than telling; your imagery is vivid and beautiful. I liked the sense of reverence you conveyed. I can relate- I live in ...

Nice, very original and fresh. My only suggestions are to cut out the words C.J. Mustang pointed out, and it struck me as a little odd and awkward how in ...

A lovely, wistful poem, beautiful in its simplicity. I thought the repetition might get tedious, but you didn't overdo it and changed the structure in the last stanza, so it ...

That's lovely! I really have no critique. ^_^ I loved your imagery and word choice. You really captured the serenity of witnessing the birth of a new day, that way ...

There's definitely something here... It's very unique, and you made math poetic, which I didn't event think possible. ^_^ But it was rather confusing. Perhaps that was intentional? I couldn't ...

Rather brilliant. the first powerful suicide poem I've ever read that wasn't by Sylvia Plath or someone. XD I guess I don't totally fathom it... my interpretation is that it's ...

Hmm... Content wise, I can definitely relate to this, though I've heard it before. Style wise... it's really ramble-y and just not that poetic. I think it has potential though; ...

I like the tough yet down-to-earth tone of this poem, and the rhymes were well- done. Like Gadi said it reminded me of lyrics. This part seemed pretty random and ...

Very interesting... The phrasing and imagery are lovely, but I had a hard time deciphering much meaning from it- all I really gathered was you were adressing a seductive women- ...

Wow. This is really well-written and interesting! Others have beaten me to all the nit-picking, but one suggestion I have is perhaps you could describe the hospital in a bit ...

Finally reviewing this, love. :) Might be hard for me to be very harsh as I am completely obsessed with Hornblower at the moment and Hornblower-esque things make me squee. ...

I really enjoyed it.I'm not even that into fantasy, but it had a complex plot and well-developed characters.. Ali was a little clichéd but still an awesome heroine. And I ...

Hello. ^_^ This is a very engaging, intriguing beginning (I assume it is a beginning?) and I really enjoyed your descriptions. Nitpicks: [quote]Click click click [/quote] I'd italicize that, it's ...

This is rather gorgeous. Vivid, but dreamlike at the same time. I love "appolo's sun." Two infinitesimal nitpicks: In L5, I'd replace "tapping" with "patter." The "muah" is indeed out ...