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Nice! GREAT job with the rhyme and rhythm. I liked how this seemed kind of old fashioned, and I liked the imagery. So, no complaints, really. It's not exactly new ...

Yeah, the book was better, but I did like the film. It was visually beautiful, but you didn't get the beautiful language of the book.

Thanks for your comments! Yeah , Herotodus was first. I'll take that into consideration. I know this is a bit sloppy- sorry. Like I said, it's really not an essay, ...

That sounds interesting. Kitty15, what was the film called? That sounds good, too.

I've only read 7. Ouch.

Loved it, even if it was kind of predictable, like Pushca said. I love Melinda's sarcastic humor.

I've sent this in to a magazine... still waiting to hear back. Thank you all again for the crits! ^_^

Thanks. It's weird, in any other genre of writing punctuation isn't usually a problem for me, but I have issues with punctuating poetry. Ari, I think the parenthesis and spaces ...

'Tis edited. Thanks, everyone!

Lol, whoops. Je n'aime pas... accents :? . Thanks alot!

Yes, totally cliche, but school crushes ARE cliche, wonderfully so. I loved it's sweetness and simplicity. I'd definitely take Snoink's advice, it would flow more smoothly.

I've only read the first book, 'twas awesome... It's great to see fresh, original fantasy that doesn't rely on cliches and isn't totally predictable... *coughChristopherPaolinicough*

That was... depressing. But good. I was a little confused by the first stanzas, but as I kept reading it made sense. Sorry I can't be more constructive.

"Tresses" is an old fashioned word for locks of hair, I guess... Cute limerick, Jenna. You amuse me. :D

Yeah, re-format it the way Surreal suggested and you'll have an interesting poem. I believe this is the first poem I've read about Star Wars...