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Gabe Once long ago Mogadishu, Somalia was a hub for fine commerce. Those days had long since passed, leaving the city in a chaotic mess of violent rival militias and ...

This is cute, I'm not sure if its trying to be anything more than cute, but I hope not because I quite like it the way it is. As for ...

This was a fine poem the first time I read it, but I felt I was missing something so I went over it a few more times. I'm glad to ...

I walked onto the elevator and pressed twenty-four. The button lit up. Seized with exhaustion I collapsed theatrically against the back wall of the elevator. Letting loose alone on elevators ...

This is quite entertaining to read, and I love the almost cinematic formate that you used for writing this story. For the most part it is very well written and ...

This was an interesting piece. You have a voice that as, mentioned above, seems to be emulating a traditional voice, however frequent awkward phrases seems to make it less powerful. ...

There is a certain harmony in Reykjavik. Quietly, away from the spotlight, Icelanders have managed to create a city with no real shortcoming. Defying all urban logic Reykjavik is able ...

This was a nice poem! With that said, peaceful as can be, but none the less, I found a dress as black as black can be. It does not flow ...

This was obviously a very personal piece. For the most part you do a very fine job of portraying a dark tone. However, with the typos and awkwardly phrased lines, ...

The Thursday afternoon cup of coffee tickled my bowels and leaving my cubicle, I made my way to the bathroom on the floor below to avoid and embarrassing run ins. ...

this is very nice. There is something kind of dreary image in this poem, I think its partly because your word choice was fantastic. Each three or four letter line ...

This is really powerful. Often when people write poems along these lines they turn out rather corny, this poem was obviously very well thought out, very meaningful and absolutely not ...

What has happened to you Oden? (And the greater image of Norse mythology?) Odin, Son of Borr, Son of Buri, I am sad to report today your image as the ...

I see that you plan on making corrections to this, which are very needed. Other that the basic corrections, I think you also need to do some serious revising to ...

This is a really nice piece, I think you use very graceful language, I especially love the first stanza, although all of them are very strong. -There is a hum ...