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Azila. I love this. Everything about it and more. I feel like a lot of writing that I read--even really famous writing by amazing, amazing authors--isn't able to emote as ...

I definitely feel a sense of really, really strong emotion. Especially here: I wish I didn’t I really wish that I could Brush you off Forget you But I can't. ...

Before she raped him, the salmon-pink rash on his neck looked innocuous, even attractive—the way it slipped up under his hair like a spider web, silky-smooth and so ready to ...

“Who am I? This or the other? Am I one person today and tomorrow another?” -- Dietrich Bonhoeffer, “Who Am I?” I. Today we sold our old house in Israel. ...

This piece felt so tragic. But that word is too blunt... I felt like it was complex, in a simple way--powerfully allegorical... You can really build up tension during your ...

Not to disclaim... but I wrote this very tentatively, before sleeping, without reading over. If it's horrible, please be very harsh! Funeral of an Adopted Mother She tried on the ...

I agree that this was immensely powerful. I don't want to echo the others, but I felt like this did come from your heart of hearts--and it was as emotionally ...

are you a poem or just a sordid fantasy? if you’re blind as a bat then can you feel the night? or do you just melt into it, the ridges ...

In the light of our preceding conversations— those husky, coffee-laden strings of observations on the nature of the human condition— we naturally collapsed into bed together, your face tinted and ...

As usual, tremendous imagery, and an almost methodical lyrical-iness. Each image, when read as an autonomous piece of writing, sizzled into my brain. However, this poem is just that--a collection ...

the older the night the colder the chills as they break through my skin, spine like ice plopping into a simmering pot in winter, orange sweatshirts in snow and thoughts ...

This is not your best, for several reasons. It's very repetitious, and although it works in some poems, this one just smacks of redundancy. The most explicit phrase is "trickle ...

topography The word does not fit. Why, godssakes, in Missouri it's practically a sport! This sentence sort of shrugs off the seriousness of the paragraph. I read that paragraph as ...

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Hey luv2write42!!! I definitely enjoy reading rhyming poetry once in a while, so the rhyming here was pretty sweet. I have no general disagreement with any specific choice of words ...