Gadi.

So much pressure ad so much...ugh... ughness. So much more sex. And pimples. Ugh.

That was astounding. The way you put romance into such a bare object as a chance meeting between two specific persons was incredible. I love the beginning, which is a ...

I hate being a teenager. :(

I agree with the others: simple, short, sweet, yet not memorable. I don't know how, but maybe you should squeeze some summery images into it...then it would have a certain ...

I like them both in different ways--the first one is more simplistic, more narrative, but not more personal that the other--which is much more formal and royal, sort of like ...

Oh, common! Don't let this die :( !

It is a vacant page in the beginning: a kernel of my pen yet to be born into a bitter and bare being. But then, the valley turns to a ...

So I read it again now, after I just saw your entry, and it all works, other than the last image (cobblestone). Now what does that mean? That poetry should ...

Amelia, your edit didn't change too much for me... I think now the main mistake is clearer: you have too many images, and they're mixed in a way that separates ...

It read nicely, but overall this wasn't too good. It seemed too confused and, well, blankish regarding the emotion or meaning behind the words. The title didn't fit and the ...

Thanks for everything! All of you guys thought the same thing--it's too abstract, too unconnected. I agree. Here's what I see it as: On the steps to school a senior ...

5/10 Ugh. Sorry. It's just a little...well... I don't like it. I can't really see it in the first place, and in the second it's just a girl with red ...

On the steps to school a senior whimpered in my ear: “Homer was rejected! second year in a row!” And something hazy climbed back to the crypts of my mind: ...

The Elements

This would be pretty short but I have to say that it was somewhat intriguing, though I was not glued to the screen. ---The dialogue was a bit...welll...unrealistic. The way ...