Gadi.

Of course I wrote this! SO PROUD!

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I like it! 10/10

Thank you very much for your critiques! I tried to change it according to your suggestions, except the one where you both thought it would be better to make it ...

NICE! I really like it now. :) It's excellent. There are only two problematic lines now: "And intrudes on its one-perfection." I think it's that last word that makes this ...

Nice! This really made me understand what the dance is like, especially the last lines--broken dolls is a good way to put it. It's sort of like everybody was circling ...

Ha! It's funny, but it's still very thought-provoking, as elephantwalrus said, and yet it's also quite bizarre, in a deep, evil way. I liked that you made such innocent play ...

I like this poem. It had incredibly language, beautiful images, an interesting concept, amazing assonance (The page os too white to write on, to de file with...) But the structure ...

HEAR HEAR!!!!! You eight are the best! There's a reason you are JM's now!

How do you outline a chapter? How much do you write in an outline?

6/10 Sorry! I don't really see what it is, though it looks interesting... :?

Nice! This is pretty good for a first post, I have to say, and I liked it. Good job so far. Your metaphore was a bit cliche, but I think ...

WOW. I am amazed. This is pure electricity. How...how did you write this? What was your inspiration? What...how? I have to say I loved this. It was disturbing in a ...

I read this again and (it's still good!) I found something that can improve the rhythm and meaning of your last stanza enormously. Instead of "playing"--make it "plays."

This is an okay poem. I liked how you rhymed it and produced interesting concepts, but much of the poem was bland and unprecise. It is short, and therefore is ...