Gadi.

This poem seems SO sophisticated! Of course, violins are sophisticated, but this seems so mature and yet so light! I loved the idea of making love to your violin (not ...

I’ve been sent on a mission. I am of no religion, of no cult, of no club, of no family, of no race, of no age. I’ve been sent on ...

It looks like you wrote it really fast. I agree with the others: it is prose, and the runover sentences are more like narrative poetry than actual fiction. It's good ...

I liked this. A lot. The imagery, the words, the lines, the structure--everything was perfect. It flowed, and the story itself could be translated into a poem. In fact, the ...

How do I make more people review and critique my stories? Why do they look at others' stories while mine remain unviewed and uncritiqued? Do I need to review other ...

Certainly interesting, and very good. I like the beginning of the friendship. And it has a nice little, cute if I may say, plotline. However, the characters are sorta flat. ...

Fascinated by what will happen next. Of course, the first part is always the hardest because we don't see the reasoning behind the actions. But maybe delve into the character ...

COOL! i loved it. It was really dramatic in the end, so sudden, and I mean I expected it, but not in that way! Some things: It was confusing because ...

I liked how both lines were a punchline at love. This punchline at love is from your own experience, and that makes it so much better! Snowed is an excellent ...

That was good! It certainly kept me there to the last part. I liked the way you mentioned that you were all alone, and that the people around you were ...

I liked the rhymes! I liked the story! what I didn't like was your lack of poetic devices, such as alliteration, imagery, etcetra.

It was very good, but too cliched. Where are the imagery? Where is the lyrical benefit? All I read was the too often used "I love you" that resonates in ...

A metal fence once rolled against the side of my backyard like a Berlin Wall on the other side was my neighbor’s yard my crust shone palid, his henna my ...

Hey Angelina! I am new to the site too, and I am really excited. I finally discovered a young authors website and it works! I am so happy! See ya!

This is what I achieved today in writing the story. Please tell me if you like it or not--critique it, too, and I will add more and more as I ...