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You don't need to include much of the fantasy school stuff, most of it can centre on the disease's spread. I mean, that's what the main source of conflict is, ...

Yes, I much appreciate you posting the UN articles and Geneva Convention stuff - I learned something. As regards the question, yes - torture is cruel and inhumane. And STILL ...

Yes, that's great.

Claim first, then make up for the remaining eight (from the proposed thirteen).

This was an idea I had for a TV series but I felt it would work much better as a Storybook. Conspiracy thriller with perhaps a sci-fi element. THE SET-UP: ...

Hey there. Personally, I don't like starting with an "I." You might, but I can think of many other ways to begin a story. You could use a participial phrase: ...

Hey there, Absolutely adore the concept. A few issues, apart from the errors already discussed: 1. The stanza "Till a dog found them and all of their sin" does not ...

Can it work? When is it best to use it?

Hmm, interesting. I'm certainly fine with it. Agree with all comments above. This is a liberal, 21st century society people! Go for it!

I thought it was King; I was quoting from a passage he wrote entitled "Non-violence." Did Gandhi contribute the idea first? Hmm, interesting.

Good old Biology. Okay, Cpt. Smurf, I take my comment back. There could be some biological influence in homosexuality.

And an eye for an eye leaves everybody blind, as Martin Luther King rightly said.

Hey there from cloudy England! Welcome to YWS! Hope you have fun here. Remember to review at least 2 pieces before you can submit stuff. I'm sure it's great! Feel ...

This definitely shows promise. Most of this consists of bland statements that only skim the emotional surface of the issue at heart. Your was/were expressions, such as: "Then there was ...

I think the problem lies in finding a story with enough 'legs', enough complexities. Get a plot that is meaty and allows you to break out of the narration and ...