GinaERufo

Thank you for taking the time to read the beginning of my story! I'm actually submitting this to a youtube paranormal storyteller, so it definitely had to have certain similarities ...

Thank you for the review! Yes,eveything you and others pointed out was a stylistic and creative choice, but it's okay to not find it your style

No problem :)

Thank you for the great review Queenie! I sort of wrote this in spurts, so I see what you are saying about making sure to have consistent punctuation. I'm glad ...

Alright, I understand. If you, or anybody else, would like to PM me I can explain to you

Also, a lot of the things, like his heart bursting, are historical so I can't explain that to you

Thank you. I could understand where someone may get confused, but I think if you were to read into the poems and begin to understand the words, it would become ...

of course! :)

haha thank you! I was having some trouble breaking the sentences a part where some of them would, and others wouldn't and I figured it was better to leave it ...

thank you so much! I really appreciate your input!

of course! :)

You too! I don't think you need to improve much at all, just add a few commas but otherwise your story is great!

Thank you! I'm glad that I was able to move something in you with this, all of my inspiration comes from my immigrant grandmother. Anyway, if you want to see ...

Thank you! My plan was for their to be less of a rhyming scheme and more of a syllable scheme, so you will notice that there is a syllable pattern ...

hi :) I'm back. I just wrote my own poem, the first one I've ever shared with people and I have to commemorate you because poetry is not easy