HausOfDay

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll try to edit it today. I slept on it before and now I think I'm prepared to make the right adjustments.

I know of the sun, of the light that pours over your tongue, as you talk, talk, of it. I am a weight upon this image; a shadow. I spread ...

The first stanza was definitely the best. You captured the emotion wonderfully, perhaps because it was so raw, and a more nerve twanging subject. I love this: Even her scent ...

You are very brave to talk about an experience like this, and for that I hail you. It's lovely to see people making use of a bad situation and turning ...

Thank you all for your comments! Yes, I do seem to forget that I am writing for an audience, and they aren't going to know what exactly I mean unless ...

I don't think you were harsh at all, I do think it is a little imature, especially for a poem dealing with something so defining. I will certainly take note ...

Thank you very much, I'm glad you both like it :) Even the most awful things manage their own beauty sometimes, you enjoying it, I would say, is an example ...

Thanks I'm glad you both like it :)

They say I killed him, the horned ones; murdered Moloch. Slew the monster , that’s what they say. Voices scraping across my skin, like gravel, through cell bars. Took him ...

The imagery is beautiful. I agree with everyone else, the yolk moon is f'ing gorgeous. I'm so jealous I didn't come up with that. I also love that you 'cup ...

This reminds me so much of Paradise Lost, really beautiful language. I often feel this way about humans, if that is what you're addressing here, if not I'm completely off, ...

This is absolutely wonderful! I loathe the men who hit her, ugh, bastards. Very impressed by the detail, especially like the 'tangy blood', that was lovely. You write so well ...

You're certainly right! I need to change it to: 'too dark to bare' Glad that you like it :)

Back, back, back against the wall, wall, wall. Clawing at the river, I ached for it all. For the grey filth to swallow me, not the other way around. For ...

I enjoy the detail that you go into, and the comparison between the bird and gems is wonderful, more so because it is an oxymoron, such a thing is impossible, ...