HeadInTheClouds

Like piepieman22 said, it would be less confusing with two or three stanzas. Other than that it was nice. I liked how it was hopeful instead of morbid and depressing ...

Heheh, I'm VERY arachnaphobic(sp?), so this gave me chills just because of the title. Even so, I thought it was pretty good. Just a few things: Within the chest, they ...

We read it in my Language Arts class a while back. At first I found it boring, but that was probably just because I hate being forced to read anything ...

I actually have to say the first time I read Eragon I thought it was mildly enjoyable. But give me a break, I had just turned eleven at the time. ...

Even as I try to kill it, Something about this doesn't sound right to me. It sounds very harsh and un-descriptive. I'd suggest wording it differently. I open my frightened ...

On a good note this is very well-written for someone your age. I probably couldn't write something like that unless I worked on it until Christmas. I applaud you for ...

I liked this I really like the idea that one action can create a chain reaction. Some of it wasn't very well-written, but overall it was very good (and I ...

This was very good overall. It started off a little shaky but improved and really drew me in towards the end. The only think it lacked was a little discription. ...

If you don't count the fact that they are total rip-offs of LOTR, Star Wars, and a buch of other books they really aren't all that bad. They are very ...

Wow, this was great! I was a bit confused about the hallucination/dream/whatever it was scene and I had to read it again to fully get it, but that and a ...

Ooh, very beautiful. I loved your choice of words and how well they flowed together, and I really felt like I knew what the narrator was thinking and feeling. I ...

This was very good Baroness. As Inkweaver said before, it didn't flow quite as well in the beginning as it did in the end, but I really enjoyed reading it. ...

First off, I thought this was very good overall. I felt like I really got what you were trying to say. But as was mentioned before, it didn't flow all ...

That was very good, if not a bit short. It really made me want to see what happens next. Thunder boomed as lightning arced across the darkness of the midnight ...

This is very good, I really enjoyed reading it. I think I got the jist of it, and I thought it flowed very well. If we only knew that memory ...