Hope

I thank god that it has a happy ending.

Ha, I guess you might like horses? Yeah you could use more description like of the surroundings and stuff. Maybe a little more intro too. I think it's good though, ...

Yeah I like it. You made a couple of errors like captalizing and spelling like Sureal wrote, but I like it alot.

of course

Hmm, that's really interesting. So have you done this before? It's really cool.

Please keep going!

Yeah that's true.

Wow, okay I can't think of anything to say (which is pretty unusual). Very cool I like it, alot.

Thanks is was just kind of for practice. I don't know if I'll continue.

any time

Yeah I'm beginning to understand. You could add a little more description though, like how Caprice looks and maybe their surroundings. I like it.

I definitely agree with Rei and Muse. It's very original and I hope you keep going. I haven't really seen anything like that before, but it's cool.

Oh great, I hope you post it soon.

Wow, I liked it alot. It would help if you could add more description. If you could explain more about why Bastien wanted to beat the crap out of Clayton ...

Thanks Mattie. I tried to fix the things you commented on. What book is it like? I really want to change it up some more if it's like some other ...