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Hi Stegosaurus! I liked your comments about making the scenes more realistic and doing background research before writing. Also, I agree that I should lead up into main scenes rather ...

Hi Wonderwoman! I hope I have the time to continue the story and write part 2. The ending was a bit rushed because I wanted to finish this story and ...

Hi MrMuddyPig! I agree that my dialogue needs to be less formal. I'll try working on that for next time. Thanks for the review!

Thanks tigeraye for the review. I agree I should put more emotion in the dialogue and add more description to each scene. The ending was abrupt because I tried to ...