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IAmthePhoenix

IAmthePhoenix

  • Poetry » General, Other Re: Bathroom Blues

    Consider putting this under the "humor" section; this is hilarious. I don't have much to say about your poem. It's simple, short, and sweet. You have a rhyming couplet near ...

    Sep 20, 2017
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Supernatural Re: Mother

    Good concept, plot and pacing. I would definitely rank this as an all around good piece. But let me try to get you to that fantastical place that we call ...

    Sep 20, 2017
  • Short Story » Realistic, Teen Fiction Re: Five Months

    This is good. This is very good. The drama isn't drawn out and overdone. The tone is melancholic but not depressive. The imagery is somber and exquisite. I can see ...

    Sep 11, 2017
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Mystery / Suspense Re: The Realisation

    This is definitely an intriguing read, mostly because I don't know. That's it. "I don't know" is the appeal of your story. Maybe this is really happening in some fantastical ...

    Sep 11, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Teen Fiction Re: Oh, Cherry Blossom: Chapter 1

    Whoa. That sums up my review. The foreshadowing! The suspense! The action! This was great. My heart was racing through the latter half, and I absolutely loved it. Only a ...

    Sep 11, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Mystery / Suspense Re: A Mystery at Lint High: Chapter One

    This is a good first chapter to a story, but it can always be better, and I'm going to try my best to get you to that fictitious place called ...

    Sep 11, 2017


here is the deepest secret nobody knows (here is the root of the root and the bud of the bud and the sky of the sky of a tree called life; which grows higher than the soul can home or mind can hide) and this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart i carry your heart (i carry it in my heart)
— e.e. cummings