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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Humor Re: VALOR - Chapter 2 - First Class and First Impressions

    Hey again! I'm baaaaaaaaaccckkk . This chapter was a marked improvement from Chapter 1! While there are still a couple choppy sentences and run-ons, or a missing comma here and ...

    Apr 26, 2020
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Stargazer

    This poem is wonderful! I can't begin to imagine how you wrote something so ethereal and dare I say it, [I]magical[/I}. However the rhymes are a little weak, but that's ...

    Apr 26, 2020
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Loud

    Hey there! I really like this poem. The enjambment really adds to the reading experience. I left every line curious as to what was coming next, and it never disappointed! ...

    Apr 26, 2020
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Mythic Legends Chapter 1

    Hey there, this was an awesome story! Raygal, Riptide, and Grimbell are all distinct and super interesting. On that note, I felt that the language got a little elementary school-ish ...

    Apr 24, 2020
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Literature Re: The sound of the moonlight

    As someone who loves the night, this was great! It really got the feeling of being alone during a peaceful night. But it almost felt like you were running out ...

    Apr 22, 2020
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: VALOR - Chapter 1 - Highmark Academy

    Hey there! This story is super great, I'm excited to see where this goes :) . That said, I have a couple notes. I'll try to keep it short, though ...

    Apr 22, 2020
  • Short Story » Realistic, Dramatic Re: My Light

    This was a pretty good short story! But I have a few notes; - There was a lot of "I felt this way" and "I felt that way" instead of ...

    Apr 22, 2020
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: An Escape

    This was a good poem. The topic matter was handled well, and the mood is apparent. However, I feel as though the imagery could have been more striking. You did ...

    Apr 22, 2020
  • Short Story » Satire, Culture Re: Alkaline

    First things first; this is an amazing story. I really enjoyed how you know who your audience is, and didn't try to dumb down the metaphors, vocabulary, etc. HGsomeone mentioned ...

    Apr 22, 2020
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Dramatic Re: Burn

    I love this poem! One of my favorite things about it is how you kept the lines short and simple. It really reads as a stream of frantic thoughts tangled ...

    Apr 22, 2020
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Diary Entry

    Nice poem! While I'm impressed, I feel as though the imagery could have been more specific. To me, a poet is someone who knows how to paint a picture with ...

    Apr 22, 2020


“Rise like Lions after slumber In unvanquishable number. Shake your chains to earth like dew Which in sleep had fallen on you— Ye are many—they are few.”
— Mary Shelly