Ignatius5453

I liked the title, very inventive and creative, and your punctuation was acceptable, better than many on YWS, and the poem was good, I liked the imagery and vivid pictures ...

I actually loved it, your vocabulary was awesome, you had punctuation and you had a good central idea. the one critique I DO have, is that the first letter of ...

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Not a bad poem, just some parts didn't really fit together, its like you were squeezing the wrong pieces together in a puzzle. For instance: red on black blue on ...

Well, well, well, it seems you were quite talented when you were 12, assuming you've gotten better since then, you've gotta be a hell of a poet now. I read ...

I can agree with you that it needs some editing as it is a bit raw, but it wasn't as bad as you say it was. Force once someone used ...

I agree with Snoink, it seems like you were fighting writers block, and well, it was extremely raw. And you had no punctuation, AT ALL. I'm sitting here , dragging ...

It. Was. A Jumble. Of. Words. There. Was. No. Punctuation!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Fix that, and make some actual lines and this won't be so bad. AND CAPITALIZE YOUR I's!!!! No i like ...

That was as deep as Lake Baikal, it was awesome, I felt the emotion come trembling out of the words and into my head, it was perfect. I couldn't have ...

Great poem, I wish it had never ended. The entire poem was so moving, like you knew exactly what you were going on about. Great job, I couldn't have done ...

I think you did a wonderful job, I would nitpick but I'm not in the mood at this second and you have quite a large amount of reviews already that ...

Not a bad poem, it was a valiant effort, you gave it a good shot but the rhyming was all helter-skelter and ihhhhhh. It could do with a load of ...

I liked the rhyme scheme and how you had the poem flow. I could feel the love, or whatever you were trying to convey. The poem... was good... even great... ...

Finally, some punctuation. One of the only times anybody has ever used punctuation, that I've seen, though I do see a slight lack of commas, but the poem overall was ...

Use stanzas/paragraphs/breaks PLEASE! It is so difficult to read if you don't. But otherwise, I love your name (unsocialbutterfly), brilliant, and yes life is hard, and you deserve to rant ...