Incandescence

This is a pseudo-intellectual piece of garbage. Your point was weakly construed and wrong. "People will not necessarily be transient." The sad truth is: we are. "The rumour that they ...

You stole this from Senor_Saurkraut at TYWC/Scissorquiz on YWS. Please don't plagiarize, it diminishes everyone. Here's the original:

Can we say, "lame-o"? Please try to steer away from describing to me what life is. I subscribe to my own philosophy, and this was little short of garbage. You ...

A romanticized piece. But you pulled it off well, not sounding to cheesy or moonstruck. I liked this poem, but then again, I'm a fan of compensated dating (in theory, ...

This: darkness also known as the past. Would be fine as: darkness also known as the past I think "lame" is a very good word for this poem, although you're ...

Well, everyone seems to enjoy it. So let me break this moment of reminiscent praise and say that it was "okay." I didn't understand the point you were trying to ...

Try to evade words that end in "ness." Such as "deadness," which has got to be the stupidest word I have ever heard. This poem was not very...mmm...emotionally or logically ...

"After all these years"? You're...14, you know? Unless you suffer from the Oedipus Complex, I think you romanticized the poem and metastasized it into something putridly manic. At any rate... ...

This is way too abstract. Like I've said before, you could be a great poet if you would stop combining words and forming images, like "plastic rain" or "I spit ...

It's aim was to profess a certain moral philosophy of perverseness. Not in the hey-little-kid-want-candy pervert, but the kind who realizes only a few, select persons will ever alter the ...

:returns from bathroom after puking: I'm afraid to inform you this was not a poem; it was a cliched interrogation of a person you probably don't know all that well. ...

Orwellian political thinking isn't my cup of tea, per se. A lot of his predictions are extreme, and the only reason why any of them have survived is because of ...

Nah, I don't mind vulgarity and profanity in poetry (look at my poetry and my stories). But there is a proper way that can add to the poem, and there ...

Because this is one of those poems that is best left unscathed and unrevised (minus the grammatical errors) unless you want to stipulate changing the whole poem, I am going ...

To verbose. You could have eliminated and assimilated many lines, some of which were redundant. However, this is not a very oft written thing; most poems about parents become rants ...