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Thanks, guys. :) I've done most of the things you two suggested. I'll consider change the tense, but I'm not to sure on that. I got rid of the adjectives ...

Hey, Tiff. I'm back with the second half of the critique, if you're ready for it. ;) This part is a lot better than the one before it. I enjoyed ...

Thanks, guys. I've fixed all of the technical stuff that you mentioned. Nice to get such awesome crits after ages away. ^_^ This won't be the actual Main Character of ...

Thank you for that amazing crit, Bubbles. *hugs* I've tried to edit most of the stuff you said, and I think it's really made it better. :) Now, just to ...

Okay, now I've given this fist part a complete re-write, and now I need your opinions again. Any help would be much appreciated. My tutor sent this one back and ...

Thanks for all the crits, guys. I actually did have more of a reason why she does what she does, but I'll detail that further when I do more on ...

Thanks for all the crits, everyone. :) I just edited most of the stuff you guys said. There might have bee a couple of things I've left out, but there ...

I edited most of the stuff you said, except for one thing. Okay, this bit annoyed me. Shouldn't it hvae gone to 7? On the clock I have, when you ...

Fine. Anything in particular that you would like critted? xD

I'm sorry. It was begging me for a crit. :)

Thanks for the crits, guys. Sorry, I lost my portfolio again. :lol: It looks like I've got a fair bit of editing to do now... Not just on this story. ...

Thanks for the crit again, Cabassi. Perfect as always. :) I'll have to work on the description next time I come back to it. Right now, I have like six ...

Thanks, Flem. . . -needs a better nickname for you xD- That was really helpful. I just edited most of the stuff you said. Thanks for spotting the overseas conflicted ...

Thanks for the crits, guys. :) Charlie, I made most of the suggestions you made. Thanks a heap for that effort. :D Now I'll just add some more description of ...

Yay! Thanks for that, Bubbles. I think I just done most of the things you suggested. And you'd better not be teasing that name. You did come up with it, ...