JC

Okay, this is my second poem...which I wrote in a fret of, well....butterflies... Feel free to tell me everything that is wrong about this...I'm not a poet by any standards ...

You finally posted! Yay! Sorry if I can't give a really in depth critique of thig, it's too good. How old is Lyla again? Anyways, good job! Keep it up! ...

--"find out what happened" just as a technical bitch, u s'pose happens would fit better? just cos' like, when you've read it, it happened, but if u haven't read it ...

yay! Uh...and uh, about narrow, please put the different chapters in different makes it easier to differentiate between posts. -JC

8/10 it reminds me of the ace of spades =D

I started this chapter off as the verdict, but when I got to theend of this I realized it was complete enough in itself. =D. Thanks for reading! -JC

Philosophy of the Dark Chapter 34 continued -Growing up The jury walked away, they were going to make their decision. All day had been about closing statements and final evidence. ...

hehe, okay. I'll be sure to tell everybody when I post the verdict, seeing as it's a big thing. Or is it??? OHH! The suspense! hehe. I'm actually almost done ...

well, that just goes to show you that people don't always grade on quality as much as concept eh? I'm glad your real english teacher wasn't a complete idiot =D ...

I still don't get it...but it makes me giggle a little =D 7/10

One, I meant hand. Just think about it eh? Guy. Computer. Hand. "me time" to put it bluntly. And uh...snails can't move backwards. Basically she was saying that Jenny had ...

Color My World Chapter 1 He broke up with me the cowardly way; through a yearbook signing. I was excited when I started it, pissed when it was over. Two ...

hey Kylan! I just realized something, a lot of your writing is the same, as in detailed to the spider-in-the-corner. If that makes sense. Info-dump, basically. Which isn't necessarily terrible, ...

Hey! This was really good, my critique is below this! =D Jazz= Grammar, spelling, punctuation, flow and all that Jazz! Rhythm= Plot and style. How well does it flow and ...

hehe. Yup, my shortest chapter yet! I should be done with the verdict tonight, so =D!!!