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Okay, so it's beginning to get me more...and I've realized why it wasn't before... Genre-Skipping: Have you ever noticed that this is in the 'other fiction' section? Well, of course ...

I had a little troube knowing what was going on...I kinda spaced out near the middle. (“OOmpf! (gurgle!) SERIPH!”), Yeah...I read that like five times, and still didn't get it... ...

The shortness worked for this story. I like how you incorporated the past, though I don't really like how the same thing happened twice, kinda repeditive and I saw it ...

CRIT FOR THREE Yay, I finally get to finish this =D Okay, so, the third...instalation...I guess would be the word. It was good, I love the relationship between Taj and ...

Short. Sweet. And to the point. It was sad. ...that's about it for me...

“But we live so far apart.” James concluded, suddenly looking blue. “Yeah…” Elayne said sadly Another paragraph should start when Elayne says "Yeah..." and the paragraph after this one shoul

This was sad, in a very...classic way, which was very cool. I loved the beginning when she was looking at the snow, your description is just beautiful there. Tres bien. ...

I agree with Magicman, the last line was almost too...funny for the tone set earlier. For some reason, the part where the girl talks to him and he doesn't know ...

:!: THIS IS AFTER CHAPTER 30:2!!! Chapter 33 -Cheaters and Liars -On Both Accounts “He shouldn’t have been allowed to do that,” Tammy ranted, “why the hell did the judge ...

Then the make-up process began: foundation, to even out her, already perfect, tan skin ; mascara, to lengthen flirtatious eyelashes; eye shadow, to accentuate dark eyes like drops of honey; ...

I don't depends on my mood I guess...next time I get really depressed I will

Crit for Two: split by a broad smile which lit her whole face all the way into eyes which sparked with laughter as her blonde friend talked away at her. ...

I'm working on POD...just having a very busy week is all! I should post some today, so...yeah. And I know this is very, very cliche...but it's a topic that means ...

Wow, that was a lot of reading. I couldn't find anything before this, and I had no idea what Geezers property (part four up) meant, but it was the smallest ...

CRIT FOR FIRST PART! From the doorway I could see the ice-blue of her eyes under naturally long, dark eyelashes and arched brows, the mouth set in its usual frigid ...