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Thanks, I was kind-of rushing while I was I know that shouldn't make a difference but it did. I'm going to go back tonight and edit like crazy. P.S-I do ...

I liked it, but I got a little confused about where everything was going, perhaps add more reasoning or descriptions, maybe add a scene or two. but yeah, it was ...

well i posted another story in third peron, its in 2 sections this time its called running from yourself

Well, no Ellie dies...that was kinda the irony of the story.

Thanks. thats what i did, but most of even the recorded stories that i could find were in 3rd person, which isnt very useful for what i was trying to ...

Thanks for the advice

hehe, sorry, forgot to mention that this was a school project, just to explain the topic.

OK! a few things, this section is from a completed 374 page book! Yes I'm planning book 2, because I'm WRITING IT! so please, wait until you know the whole ...