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Any ideas how I could better make them seem beleivable? Instead of the mother knowing that her daughter has only ten minutes to live, and lets her die, how about ...

Choco- You're purple! Congrats! Anyways, I'm curious. You say that you like Anica, but not her narration. What don't you like about it? I'm having a hard time starting this ...

Hey! Everybody, thanks for reading chapter one! I'm just here to let you know that I just recently posted chapter two. It would be amazing if you critiqued it ;D ...

Suggestions- Keep writing, and the perfect title will come to you =D

Fayth- it's because there are so many people who love him so much, for reasons I don't quite understand.

I was going to buy it once, but the reviews weren't so great. Maybe I should stop relying on other peoples opinions, eh? Anyways, I'll try to check it out, ...

Oh. Maybe you should try spelling it phonetically then, because right now it just looks wrong. Or you should try spelling it the more traditional way of 'vampyre'

Thank you, and much better :)

So, let me clear this up, does she look human? Or does she look like a fox?

They were tiny mirrors that fell, cracked, and splashed the world that was beneath the clouds. Here you have excess words. That, and was. They don't really add anything to ...

Actually, I do need to go back and rework the beginning, because I was writing an entirely different story then. It changed, as most things do, and became what it ...

Yeah, I think I hated that Tally gave in so many times. Uglies and Pretties were good, Specials wasn't so much, and I don't think I'm going to read Extra's ...

Okay, save myself from sounding trite, let me say one thing about Kyra and Jacob Zyter- They aren't full vampires. They're fledlings, which basically means that they're in the first ...

Thanks for reading it Gene, that's a compliment. Um, about what was missing, I kind of felt that while I was writing it, but I wasn't quite sure what it ...

wow. This is such an old almost hurts to read. hehe. Anyways, for those of you interested, the vampire in me has decided that I need to write an actual ...