JabberHut

I'll just keep posting until the end. I think I got a good story going, but I would like some comments of encouragement. Here's chapter 4. Chapter 4 I was ...

I dunno if anyone is reading this story still, but I'm gonna post anyway. Here's chapter 3. Chapter 3 He was not caught, which was a relief to me. My ...

Deputy is actually the assistant. He is really a deputy sheriff. Well, if any people want to keep reading, then here's chapter 2. hope ya'll like! :D Chapter 2 My ...

I agree, just be a bit more descriptive with your writing and you're good to go. I liked it, however. Never give up! Always keep moving forward! :) Shadow pretty ...

I never really written a western type story. This chapter pretty much describes the main character and holds explanations for the rest of my story. Let me know how it ...

Good poem, buddy-ol'-pal. I agree that the poem does not flow. I'm not too good with poems, so correct me if I'm wrong or if I'm missing something. There is ...

Pretty good, my good friend! 'A is for a awesome leader'--it's AN awesome leader 'S is for sword of the Jedi'--sword or saber? 'O is for obvious daughter of Han ...

Okay, this type of story is a first for me. I never took this path in the fantasy world. It was coming closer. A tall figure coming slowly as if ...

When you fall, the air rushes past you really fast and that can dry your eyes out.

Great, thanks for the tips. I'll get to work on that right now. Later on, I'll post Chapter 2 so comments on the Chapter 1 is still welcome.

Yes, very good imagery. I liked it very much. I very well written first attempt! Just to be picky, I believe that the first letter of each line should be ...

lol, that's very...unique? I'm glad I'm not on the same car ride as you. :wink:

“We’re losing control” shouted the pilot. He reached for the CB radio and shouted into it over the dying engine, “Everyone must evacuate the plane! I repeat: Everyone must evacuate ...