Jasmine

Thanks for the feedback, it's been really helpful. This will be my first lengthly short story so I will definitely be posting more for additional advice, as I am one ...

I really liked this. The imagery was simple but effective and it had a nice flow. I also liked you didn't over use "If i must die," and instead used ...

Thank you so much for your review. It's nice to have someone give me advice on how to improve and make the story more interesting. I never really did go ...

Oh my goodness, this was very good. Your grammer and spelling are nearly perfect, one thing I noticed though that made me laugh because it seemed so out of place ...

Yeah, it was a little short but it's been so long since I've written it that I wasn't sure how to lengthen it without really putting myself mentally back into ...