Jellotin

Thank you so much. :) That does indeed read better, I shall make the change posthaste.

Thank you for this fantastic review. You've brought a lot to my attention that I didn't even notice. You've also stroked my ego a heck of a lot. I went ...

Sorry for the confusion. XP Yes, I now see her impassiveness in the beginning being misleading.. Dang, I'll have to think more on that. In all honesty, I don't really ...

My goodness, those pesky quotation rules! I will fix. Thank you for bringing that to my attention. I think I want to keep the last one the same, it gives ...

Thank you!

Thank you for your advice. c: I will defiantly keep this in mind when I come back to this piece in the future. Honestly, I saw it as the main ...

This review was extremely helpful. c: Thank you. I believe I've fixed the majority of the mistakes, but if there's anything I've forgotten please let me know.

Thank you so much! :D I wish I could say I really had this dream. P: That... is a wonderful point. 0-0 I will defiantly be making it more vague ...

Thank you so much for reviewing. It really means a lot to hear what the more experienced have to say. I do believe I will be expanding on this story, ...

I really enjoyed this! Wonderful work. :) It flows very well and stays on theme, but what could it possibly mean?