Jemima

thanks deavarna_satina for you're advice, Iv edited my story making most of the changes.

I got what you meant by you're poem, it was sad and emotional, even though you wrote it n 10 mins.

I really like you're story, it was imaginative and creative.

thanks for you're advice I'll make the changes as soon as possible.

I thought it was good, but the flashback was really confusing. Maybe you should say its a flash back in your story.