Jennafina

Wow... Thats really... Quite creepy. Just kiddin, lol! Very funny! I like the drawing. Those kids look soooo happy. :P

Lillian sat up, her head swimming. It was only a dream. Nothing but a memory, revisited in sleep. She recalled the rest of it. Jofi and Starla had revived Asher, ...

Is it possible to be killed by glass? I think this would flow better if you took out 'Ignore the scarlet of my head'. As a mere shadow I watch ...

^^^ Ditto Daisy about the needle. I like the concept. Its quite original, and keeps this from being average. The line 'And did something very rare' seems really forced. Maybe ...

Hehheh, nice. I knew what it would be the moment I read the title, lol. I like the leafblower verse.

Hehe paranoid? Sorry. Kidding. I am being honest. That other people like it also is just a sign that its a great poem! ;)

I like it! Very short, but sweet and discriptive. Awesome flow. :D

Lillian was in a familiar scene, at a demonstration on the steps of a temple in Sienna. It was packed with people, and she, Starla, Jofi and Asher were negotiating ...

Brian- Thank you for explaining, I'll fix that. :) Niobe- Treble means high and smooth. I fixed the rest, though. THANKS!

Thanks! I actually don't really know what you mean on the first part. Sorry, but would you mind explaining?

Okay. Sorry. I hope I didn't sound rude...

Wow, thats so sad! Really, really good though! You have the emotions so captured. Sorry to repeat everyone else. One thing.. “Thanks Callie,” she says and I feel her stand. ...

Um... Wow. Its funny how it sounds so serious, and yet is completely random. Is there some sylable thing going on? I noticed its 7-6-7-6.

Your welcome, and thanks! :) Where were we, lol. Well Ramu’s days would go that way. If you want this to feal like a story being told to the reader, ...

Wow, that was really freaky! Cool though, I like all the descriptoions. The entire thing is sort of funny in a twisted, morbid type of way..