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Jennya

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: 1. Tiptoeing over the edge. (Redrafted)

    Hey, quite nice overall. I like how you get the the point, i really admire this since I'm a waffler. Also your characters seem very interesting, nice and well balanced. ...

    Feb 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A Burdened Afterthought

    The first thing i noticed about this poem was the way it was set out. It could be great if you changed this to make it easier to read. I ...

    Feb 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Silence

    I love this. Personally i think its quite a good poem but then again I'm no expert. I like the rhyming patterns and the language is fluid. The repartition is ...

    Feb 24, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Tesseract - Chapter 2

    I quite liked this. Quite different from the stud i usually read and rather intriguing. I want to read more already. It would be nice if you could post the ...

    Feb 23, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The New Dawn; My Night.

    Hey, overall a nice poem. But I have to admit it was only nice, if not a little cliche. There was nothing really stand out about this, there is only ...

    Feb 23, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Mary-Sue: A life

    Amazing, lovely satire dips of the computer screen. I love how you did this. It seems to perfectly serious and even has a ' a little girl wrote this' tone. ...

    Feb 22, 2011
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: The Wizard of Oz

    I have never reviewed anything lyrical before, simply because I know nothing about lyric writing. So i will treat this like a poem. I quite like the reparation. As a ...

    Feb 22, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, General Re: This Isn't Me--Part One

    Insest??? Or owl city??? pushing that aside. This wasn't to bad. But I felt like a young girl was writing it not a older boy. In general the piece was ...

    Feb 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Good Dog

    Very beautiful, quite haunting. The emotion, cold emotion seems to run form like water down a stream. This is a great piece of work. I loved the first stanza it ...

    Feb 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: White Coats

    I love this poem. I like the issues it is addressing and the way you have addressed it. The constant rhetorical questions are good you have not over done them ...

    Feb 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Storm Clouds

    Nice, pretty neat. In someway it's almost a a narrative poem , rather epic. I the story, picture and mood you painted where wonderful. This is a piece to make ...

    Feb 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Piano Boy

    I agree with the person above me, breaking he overall pattern; the number of lines, the rhyming, the structure and he repetition was not partially a good thing to do. ...

    Feb 20, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Short battle scene

    I'm no expert on battle scenes but i get the feeling that this is to long to descriptive. When i write a battle scene ( very rare) i like them ...

    Feb 20, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Cyberwar

    I love your style. So very different from mine. I also love the subject matter of your poems, who would know such an nice poem could be written about shutting ...

    Feb 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Logical Love

    This was beautiful. I suggest splitting the last stanza into two so it would be more uniform. I love your language and the metaphors. The change in tone was also ...

    Feb 18, 2011


Life, although it may only be an accumulation of anguish, is dear to me, and I will defend it.
— Mary Shelley, Frankenstein